How does a sport that has athletes flying and climbing many feet in the air not be part of the Olympics? Sports acrobatics should be in the
Olympics because it is very unique and does not even compare to any other
Olympic sports. Sports acrobatics is the only sport that requires athletes to
do dangerous pyramids and stunts. This sport “is unusual that it uses the body
of another person or persons as “living apparatus”” (Olsen 4). Also sports
acrobatics has many different types of groups such a pairs, mixed pairs, trios,
and a men's four in different age divisions and levels to get many different types of
athletes involved. First time I saw an acrobatic routine I was amazed of the
difficulty of skills these athletes do and “most people don’t seem to have any
experience seeing anything like it” (Andersen 3). I saw tops flying around doing flips in the air and knew instantly that I wanted to do it too!
Bringing sports acrobatics into
the Olympics would help bring more athletes and to get other new countries
involved. There are many countries around the world facing the same issue to
get acrobatics into the Olympics. For example, Britain has a club
called Whales that has world champion athletes ready to take it to the next
level. Also there are acrobatics teams in Israel and Mexico; it would be
awesome to bring everyone together around the world that shares a common
interest of acrobatics. Sports acrobatics is fairly new and it would add a new
spark to the Olympics and bring new audience to watch it. I feel the audience
is ready for a change because they are getting uninterested with the same old
sports in the Olympics. I do understand that many Olympic sports have been
around for thousands of years, but change is also good.
Additionally many people believe
that acrobatics is very similar with gymnastics and artistic gymnastics, but acrobatics
only uses one apparatus, which is the floor. In acrobatics you can't just rely on yourself, but also your other partners. Without your partners the group will be very unsuccessful. The best way to see the difference between the two sports is to watch an acrobatic
routine. When watching a routine you will be shocked of the grace and beauty of
the sport and will wonder why it has not been entered in the Olympics.
Posted below are the different
types of group in sports acrobatics.
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| Women's trio group. |
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| This is a mixed pair group. |
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| This is a women's pair group. |
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| Men's four group. |
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| This is a men's pair group.
Here is a link of a women's Russian trio during the 2013 Acro World cup. This trio is flawless and has a very clean routine. This type of routine is called "tempo" or dynamic routine that only consists of flips and different types of summersaults. This video can help the audience to better understand the sport.
Works Cited:
Olsen, Kirsten. "2 Marylanders Find an Unusual Answer; the Uncommon Sport of Acrobatics Provides the Life Style they Sought." The Washington Post (pre-1997 Fulltext): 0. Jan 07 1988. ProQuest. Web. 22 Oct. 2013.
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1. Topic Sentence: Good title that describes the central argument!
ReplyDelete2. Support: You have many great supports and the addition of pictures was a good idea! Add more facts about Sports Acrobatics so that the central argument can have a combination of facts and your opinion.
3. Transitions: Great transitions! Good transition words used.
4. The quote was cited correctly and you followed the quote sandwich format.
5. Grammar and Spelling: The spelling and grammar was great. the only thing I found awkward was the first sentence of the second paragraph. "I feel bringing sports acrobatics into the Olympics would help bring more athletes and to get other new countries involved."
6. You have a very strong argument and argued your points well!
7. Complement: I like how you added pictures showcasing Sports acrobatics.
8. Suggestion: Add at least one more fact about Sports Acrobatics.
1. Topic sentence: The topic sentence is informational but it does not catch my attention where I want to read the rest. Try to ask a question or state a very interesting fact that no one knows to catch the reader’s attention.
ReplyDelete2. Support: The support is very interesting, very good
3. Transitions: the transitions are very well done, they go one subject to another very well
4. Quote (in "quote sandwich" format with proper MLA citation):
“most people don’t seem to have any experience seeing anything like it” (Andersen 3).
I suggest a better and longer quote to support your argument on why sport acrobatics should be in the Olympics.
5. Grammar and spelling: Good on spelling and grammar
6. Strong argument: The argument is very good but needs more support
7. Write one COMPLIMENT: Well written and very passionate about this sport being in the Olympics.
8. Write at least one SUGGESTION for improvement: More ethos and logos, better topic sentence
1. Great topic sentence. I can tell you feel very strongly about this.
ReplyDelete2. You have a lot of good support throughout your argument.
3. You used good transition words. Such as "Also"
4. Quotes were cited correctly. 2 quotes 1 Citation MLA format
5. Good grammar and spelling but fix your last paragraph a bit.
6. Very strong augment. you gave a lot of good information and quotes.
7. Great information given!
8. The only problem I saw was the last paragraph. Just work on concluding your paragraph.
1. Great topic sentence.
ReplyDelete2. The support here is great.
3. Your transition words are really good and it makes everything flow very well.
4. Your quotes was good but look for better quotes to support your topic.
5. No flaws with spelling but the last paragraph could use some proof reading but still looks great.
6. The strongest arguement i read so far.
7. I learned a lot about this support and i think it should be put in the Olympics.
8. Proof read and think of better ways of getting information out.
1. Topic sentence: Good topic sentence, if you could try to add more spark to it by using adjectives. For example you could talk about how these athletes’ bodies are so strong that they can do things that no other sport can.
ReplyDelete2. Support: Great support on explaining what aerobatics is and the different teams you could have.
3. Transitions: Esay for the reader to follow along.
4. Quote (in "quote sandwich" format with proper MLA citation): correct MLA format. Make sure you use the quote sandwich when you are using writing out the quote.
5. Grammar and spelling: No errors found.
6. Strong argument: How in other countries they have national acrobatics teams and would also have an Olympic team ready if it did become an Olympic sport.
7. Write one COMPLIMENT: Your topic is very interesting because until I read your blog I did not even think twice about acrobatics. But now I am a strong believe that it should be an Olympic sport.
8. Write at least one SUGGESTION for improvement: Try adding statics into your blog to show how popular acrobatics is (this could be how many countries have national teams). Also in your first paragraph don’t use two quotes.
1. Your topic sentence is very strong, but could use something more to grab the attention of your reader.
ReplyDelete2. Your support is fairly good, but I would research the sport further and add more facts and statistics, if possible.
3. Your transitions are nice and smooth.
4. Your quotes are properly cited.
5. There were a few minor grammar issues, but overall grammar and spelling were both fine.
6. Your argument could have used a bit more support to make it stronger - try to avoid using "I feel" or "I think".
7. You clearly have a passion for sports acrobatics, and you present the subject in an interesting way.
8. Try researching your topic and adding in more support to create a stronger argument.